Script – Success

Success:

Two friends, best friends since Elementary School discover that High School is a different animal as far as success goes. One friend succeeds at everything, is popular, etc, and the other is forgettable. The rivalry builds as the school year goes on, until the unpopular student produces a photo on facebook that has the two friends as elementary students. At the end, both students are unpopular.

Part 1:
Elementary – Middle School: Montage of school pictures, music, camera movements, etc. – Keirstyn
Part 2:
Freshman Year: School begins, they see each other, eat lunch, etc, on the first few days, then begin split apart. – Levi
Part 3:
One rises in popularity, the other struggles, socially and academically.
One student posts picture on Facebook of the two in Junior High or Elementary School. – Lacey
Part 4:
One’s popularity unravels, the other finds out about the other posting the photo, friends are reunited, have it out, then discover the true meaning of friendship. – Strong

15 thoughts on “Script – Success”

  1. Fade in:
    Int. Cafeteria- day
    A group of friends are standing in a circle, with one girl leading the conversation and making everyone laugh. The girl next to her is her best friend. She pretends to laugh, and then looks up at her so called best friend. She fades away into a montage of her memories from their childhood, when being best friends was easier.
    EXT. OPEN FIELD- DAY
    A young fair haired girl walks up to a girl with dark hair and hands her a flower. The dark haired girl takes the flower.
    Fair haired girl
    We’re going to be best friends.
    She grabs the dark haired girl’s hand and they walk away. A camera seems to take a snapshot of them walking away, and the picture falls away into a scrapbook full of others. The camera scans over several shots of the two girls. There is a shot of the fair haired girl holding a small trophy, with the dark haired girl hugging her and smiling. Another shows them on the last day of school, on either sides of their teacher. The teacher is leaning more towards the fair haired girl, but both girls have equally big smiles. As the pages continue turning, the girls are getting older in the pictures. One thing stays the same in each of the photos; the fair haired girl is extremely accomplished at everything she does, while the dark haired girl seems to just be along for the ride. Her smile fades more and more in each picture, but still holds on tight to the fair haired girl. There is a picture of the two girls on the first day of high school; the camera zooms in and the picture comes to life.

    I was thinking about adding more to the scrapbook idea, with more pictures ‘coming to life’ in a way. To make it longer, because obviously it’s quite short. Plus there isn’t really a sense of personality of both of the girls yet.

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    1. Oh and I was just using fair haired girl and dark haired girl to differentiate, since we didn’t have names yet.

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    2. I’m not sure how we could show them slowly getting older, the way you think. unless you were actually friends in real life, you wouldn’t have pictures with each other when you’re younger. we could get elementary pictures of you guys though. just need two little girls (siblings hopefully) that look a little like you both.

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      1. Great opening, very well-written. I think if we found two little girls to record their voices and then had their voiced go over the photos of the girls, a combination of these two could work, and would be very effective.

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  2. [{“text”:”Fade In:”,”b”:1},{“text”:”Int. School -day”,”b”:0},{“text”:”Shows as KEIRSTYN walks in the front doors as a Freshman.looking happy and ready to take on highschool when LACEY sees her and walks up to her, looking kind of scared. They exchange their hellos and hug and the camera zooms out as they start comparing their schedules and talking. Shows them as they slowly go through their day, meeting up after each class, them talking about it (no sound).”,”b”:1},{“text”:”INT. CAFETERIA -DAY”,”b”:0},{“text”:”LACEY and KEIRSTYN walking up to each other and walking off together, talking.”,”b”:1},{“text”:”int. home -day”,”b”:0},{“text”:”black until you see two doors open, scene split, showing both LACEY and her as they go through their after school routine. Both doing chores, then KEIRSTYN calls LACEY, so LACEY looks down at her phone to answer and they talk as they do their homework.”,”b”:1},{“text”:”LACey”,”b”:2},{“text”:”Hey! So how was your first dday of highschool?”,”b”:3},{“text”:”keirstyn”,”b”:2},{“text”:”Great! In English class….”,”b”:3},{“text”:””,”b”:2},{“text”:”Her voice trails off and shows them working normally then fades to when they say bye.”,”b”:1},{“text”:”INT. SCHOOL -DAY”,”b”:0},{“text”:”Shows almost like the first day but a couple times after class it shows LACEY standing there waiting for KEIRSTYN but her never showing up.”,”b”:1},{“text”:”int. cafeteria -day”,”b”:0},{“text”:””,”b”:2},{“text”:”KEIRSTYN walks up to LACEY with a couple friends”,”b”:1},{“text”:”Lacey”,”b”:2},{“text”:”Hey, who are they?”,”b”:3},{“text”:”KEIRSTYN”,”b”:2},{“text”:”Oh, just some friends I met in my classes.”,”b”:3},{“text”:”lacey”,”b”:2},{“text”:”Oh, ok. Well I’m Lacey.”,”b”:3},{“text”:”INT. HOME -DAY”,”b”:0},{“text”:”Shows just like the first day, but this time when KEIRSTYN picks up her phone and calls someone, LACEY looks at her phone and it doesn’t ring.”,”b”:1},{“text”:”KEIRSTYN”,”b”:2},{“text”:”Hey Emily. Oh my god, yeah i did!”,”b”:3},{“text”:”Fades to next day and shows a slow sequence of shots of LACEY waiting for KEIRSTYN after class and her walking away when she doesnt show up.”,”b”:1},{“text”:””,”b”:2},{“text”:”INT. CAFETERIA -DAY”,”b”:0},{“text”:”Shot of LACEY waiting for KEIRSTYN at lunch and her seeing her with some people and she walks past LACEY, talking and laughing, leaving her just standing there. cut to next scene”,”b”:1},{“text”:”INT. HOME -DAY”,”b”:0},{“text”:”Cuts to a door opening and KEIRSTYN walking in “,”b”:1}]

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  3. [{“text”:”Int. School day”,”b”:0},{“text”:”one girl walking down a hallway with a large group of friends and another girl alone watching from a distance.”,”b”:1},{“text”:”(Keirstyn) teenage girl who is popular”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(random chatter very loud and silly) (from Keirstyn and her friends.)(chatter lasts untill they are out of sight and it fades away into the distance)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(ME) TEENAGE GIRL WHO IS NOT POPULAr”,”b”:2},{“text”:”( no vocal dialog but you hear her thoughts.) “What happened we were so close, and now it’s like i don”t exist anymore. Where did our friendship go?”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(Me)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(in class at my desk ) ( looking at Keirstyn on the other side of the room) (thinking) “she used to help me with this stuff school makes no sence.””,”b”:3},{“text”:”Teacher (Mr. Strong)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(who is watching me then looks up my grades and sighs)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(Keirstyn)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(on cell phone with friend) “well i just got a facebook and i have no idea whitch pictures i should post first” (she walks off still on the phone.)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(KEIRSTYN)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(on computer on facebook looking at her photos trying to decide which ones to post) (she see’s some older photos of her and another girl back in elementary school, she smiles and posts one of the photos on her page and titles it me and my best friend.)”,”b”:3}]

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  4. Fade In:
    Int. Cafeteria- day
    A group of friends are standing in a circle, with one girl leading the conversation and making everyone laugh. The girl next to her is her best friend. She pretends to laugh, and then looks up at her so called best friend. She fades away into a montage of her memories from their childhood, when being best friends was easier.
    EXT. OPEN FIELD- DAY
    A young fair haired girl walks up to a girl with dark hair and hands her a flower. The dark haired girl takes the flower.
    Fair haired girl
    We’re going to be best friends.
    She grabs the dark haired girl’s hand and they walk away. A camera seems to take a snapshot of them walking away, and the picture falls away into a scrapbook full of others. The camera scans over several shots of the two girls. There is a shot of the fair haired girl holding a small trophy, with the dark haired girl hugging her and smiling. Another shows them on the last day of school, on either sides of their teacher. The teacher is leaning more towards the fair haired girl, but both girls have equally big smiles. As the pages continue turning, the girls are getting older in the pictures. One thing stays the same in each of the photos; the fair haired girl is extremely accomplished at everything she does, while the dark haired girl seems to just be along for the ride. Her smile fades more and more in each picture, but still holds on tight to the fair haired girl. There is a picture of the two girls during the summer, the day before high school, having a water balloon fight to cool off. The camera zooms in and the scene comes to life
    Ext. backyard- day
    The two girls are laughing and running around in the backyard, when [either Lacey or I] turns the hose on [the other]. [whoever was sprayed by the hose] flops down on the grass in defeat. [the other] joins her, and they lay on the grass together looking at the clouds, thinking about what the next day will be like.

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  5. Fade In:
    Int. School –day
    Shows as KEIRSTYN walks in the front doors as a freshman. Looking happy and ready to take on high school when LACEY sees her and walks up to her, looking kind of scared. They exchange their hellos and hug and the camera zooms out as they start comparing their schedules and talking. Shows them as they slowly go through their day, meeting up after each class, them talking about it (no sound
    INT. CAFETERIA –DAY
    LACEY and KEIRSTYN walking up to each other and walking off together, talking.
    INT. HOME –DAY
    Black until you see two doors open, scene split, showing both LACEY and her as they go through their after school routine. Both doing chores, then KEIRSTYN calls LACEY, so LACEY looks down at her phone to answer and they talk as they do their homework.
    LACEY
    “Hey! So how was your first day of high school?”
    KEIRSTYN
    “Great! In English class….”
    Her voice trails off and shows them working normally then fades to when they say bye.
    INT. SCHOOL –DAY
    Shows almost like the first day but a couple times after class it shows LACEY standing there waiting for KEIRSTYN but her never showing up.
    INT. CAFETERIA –DAY
    KEIRSTYN walks up to LACEY with a couple friends.
    LACEY
    “Hey, who are they?”
    KEIRSTYN
    “Oh, just some friends I met in my classes.”
    LACEY
    “Oh, ok. Well I’m Lacey.”
    INT. HOME –DAY
    Shows just like the first day, but this time when KEIRSTYN picks up her phone and calls someone, LACEY looks at her phone and it doesn’t ring.
    KEIRSTYN
    ”Hey Emily. Oh my god, yeah i did!”
    Fades to next day and shows a slow sequence of shots of LACEY waiting for KEIRSTYN after class and her walking away when she doesn’t show up.
    INT. CAFETERIA –DAY
    Shot of LACEY waiting for KEIRSTYN at lunch and her seeing her with some people and she walks past LACEY, talking and laughing, leaving her just standing there.
    INT. HOME –DAY
    Cuts to a door opening and KEIRSTYN walking in the door.

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  6. INT. HOME –DAY
    Cuts to a door opening and KEIRSTYN walking in starts doing her usually routine while calling up people every once in a while and doing homework.
    Switches to LACEY walking in her house and she just walks in and starts watching tv, looking a little sad. Fades to when she starts getting up to go to bed.
    INT. CLASS –DAY
    Shot close of LACEY looking at KEIRSTYN from her table and she looks down at her paper not doing anything while KEIRSTYN is talking and working at the same time, happy.

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  7. [{“text”:”(KEIRSTYN) “,”b”:2},{“text”:”(walking down a hallway with a large group of friends.)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(LACEY)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(Alone watching from a distance.)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(Keirstyn) “,”b”:2},{“text”:”(random chatter very loud and silly) (from Keirstyn and her friends.)(chatter lasts untill they are out of sight and it fades away into the distance)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(lacey) “,”b”:2},{“text”:”( no vocal dialog but you hear her thoughts.) “What happened we were so close, and now it’s like i don”t exist anymore. Where did our friendship go?”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(Lacey)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(in class at my desk ) ( looking at Keirstyn on the other side of the room) (thinking) “she used to help me with this stuff school makes no sence.””,”b”:3},{“text”:”Teacher (Mr. Strong)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(who is watching me then looks up my grades and sighs)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(lacey)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(waiting for Keirstyn to answer phone but the line is busy.)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(LACEY)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(hangs up phone and walks out of house fade out of door closing.)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(KEIRSTYN)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(Fade in with keirstyn on cell phone with friend) “well i just got a facebook and i have no idea whitch pictures i should post first” (she walks off still on the phone. Fade out.)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(KEIRSTYN)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(Fade in, on computer on facebook looking at her photos trying to decide which ones to post) (she see’s some older photos of her and another girl back in elementary school, she smiles and posts one of the photos on her page and titles it me and my best friend.)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(LACEY)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(Fade in, her on facebook looking at photo and smiling happily.)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(LACEY)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(Fade in dialing # on cell phone and putting it to ear, putting phone down when it goes to voiece mail.)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(KEIRSTYN)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(in room on phone, looking upset hangs up phone and throws it on bed then leaves room, zoom in on phone, fade to school den in morning her sitting alone at a table.)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(KEIRSTYN)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(She looks around then sighs and looks back down at the table.)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(KEIRSTYN)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(She looks up hopefully as one of her friends walks by but they just ignore her.)(She looks back down at the table disapointed.)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”(LACEY)”,”b”:2},{“text”:”(fade in on her standing and watching this from a distance.)(she starts to turn around then stops and turns back, fade out)”,”b”:3},{“text”:”end part 3″,”b”:2}]

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  8. (KEIRSTYN)
    (walking down a hallway with a large group of friends.)
    (LACEY) (Alone watching from a distance.)
    (Keirstyn) (random chatter very loud and silly) (from Keirstyn and her friends.)(chatter lasts untill they are out of sight and it fades away into the distance)
    (lacey) ( no vocal dialog but you hear her thoughts.) “What happened we were so close, and now it’s like i don”t exist anymore. Where did our friendship go?”
    (Lacey) (in class at my desk ) ( looking at Keirstyn on the other side of the room) (thinking) “she used to help me with this stuff school makes no sence.
    Teacher (Mr. Strong) (who is watching me then looks up my grades and sighs)
    (lacey) (waiting for Keirstyn to answer phone but the line is busy.)
    (LACEY) (hangs up phone and walks out of house fade out of door closing.)
    (KEIRSTYN) (Fade in with keirstyn on cell phone with friend) “well i just got a facebook and i have no idea whitch pictures i should post first.” (she walks off still on the phone. Fade out.) (KEIRSTYN) (Fade in, on computer on facebook looking at her photos trying to decide which ones to post) (she see’s some older photos of her and another girl back in elementary school, she smiles and posts one of the photos on her page and titles it me and my best friend.)
    (LACEY) (Fade in, her on facebook looking at photo and smiling happily.)
    (LACEY)(Fade in dialing # on cell phone and putting it to ear, putting phone down when it goes to voiece mail.)
    (KEIRSTYN)(in room on phone, looking upset hangs up phone and throws it on bed then leaves room, zoom in on phone, fade to school den in morning her sitting alone at a table.)KEIRSTYN) (She looks around then sighs and looks back down at the table.)
    (KEIRSTYN) (She looks up hopefully as one of her friends walks by but they just ignore her.)(She looks back down at the table disapointed.)
    (LACEY) (fade in on her standing and watching this from a distance.)(she starts to turn around then stops and turns back, fade out)
    end part 3

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  9. Fade In:
    Int. School day
    We open with a wide shot of the den, with teenagers filling the shot, under the wolf. We hear snippets of conversation among the din of hundreds of voices.,
    VOICE
    Oh my god, did you see that picture that Katie put online, they are such dorks.
    Voice
    She is so cool but her friend is such a dork
    VOICE
    I know, who ever thought those two would be friends
    VOICE
    I guess they are both dorks.
    EXT. School day
    Open with a wide shot of Keristyn walking around school. Cut to POV shot of Keirstyn walking, no dialog, just shots of people pointing and laughing. Camera tilts down to her shirt, nothing on it, looks down at her pants, nothing there either.

    Music changes from a sweet violen concierto to a darker feel, the more she walks the more people point and laugh, the shot gets all fish eye, and the camera pushes closer until the entire frame is filled with people pointing and laughing at the camera.Finally she goes up to a girl she knows, holds out her arm, grabs her by the shoulder, and is about to speak when she looks down, and there, on an iPhone is the photo, with hundreds of comments.Everyone continues to point and laugh and the shot fades out.

    INT. Strong’s class day.
    Both girls are in the same class, both turn to look at each other, both look away.
    Keirstyn(controlling the tears)Mr Strong, can I use the bathroom.
    STRONG(Senses that something is wrong)Sure!
    Back to a Wide shot, medium close up of Lacey turned around, looking over at Keristyn’s empty chair.
    LACEY
    Strong, can I use the bathroom.
    STRONG
    Sure. (He looks over at Keirstyn’s empty chair.) Uh, wait until Keirstyn gets back.A few people, laugh, in on the joke. Strong just looks confused. Cross cut shots of the picture, the clock’s second hand, after a bit, she gets up and runs out of the room. Where we switch to a POV shot of LACEY moving down the hall. Around the corner, there’s KEIRSTYN, on her phone looking at the picture, her eyes are red from crying.

    KEIRSTYN
    You don’t know how many times I’ve wanted to see this picture gone during the last few days
    LACEY
    I know, I’m sorry, I guess I wanted you back, I wanted who I was, who we were, back.
    KEIRSTYN
    But that’s not possible, I mean I’m not the same, you are not the same.
    LACEY
    But in that picture we are, we are different now looking back, were both different, so were kinda the same too, you know.
    KEIRSTYN
    I have been so horribleto you, all I wanted was to be cool, to be popular, or whatever, I didn’t want to become somebody I’m not just to have friends. I really don’t know what I’m doing and I’m really lost, and I was really horrrible and I’m sorry.
    LACEY
    But I’m the one who put the picture of us up oniine, I destroyed your seocial life, I didn’t have anything to destroy.
    KEIRSTYN
    Which was why you did it.Which was why I did it.
    KEIRSTYN
    To bring us both together, back, like we were,the same.
    LACEY
    Strong’s probably called security on us by now.

    Strong walks out of the classroom, see’s them at the endo f the hall. Walks towards the two of them.
    STRONG
    LACEY, I told you to wait. And KEIRSTYN, you left class forever ago.
    LACEY
    Oh, she forgot to tell you, we were rehearsing our lines.
    STRONG
    Yeah, for what project.
    LACEY
    A video we’re working on, about friendship. It sounds kinda lame, but its pretty important.
    STRONG
    Sounds good, what’s it about?
    KEIRSTYN
    Well it’s about these two friends, in middle school.FADE OUT

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  10. Fade In Int. School day
    INT. School hallway
    (KEIRSTYN)(walking down a hallway with a large group of friends.)
    (LACEY) (Alone watching from a distance.)
    (Keirstyn) (random chatter very loud and silly) (from Keirstyn and her friends.)(chatter lasts untill they are out of sight and it fades away into the distance)
    (lacey) ( no vocal dialog but you hear her thoughts.) “What happened we were so close, and now it’s like i don”t exist anymore. Where did our friendship go?
    int. strongs classroom
    (Lacey) (in class at my desk ) ( looking at Keirstyn on the other side of the room) (thinking) “she used to help me with this stuff school makes no sence.
    Teacher (Mr. Strong) (who is watching me then looks up my grades and sighs)
    int. house
    (lacey) (waiting for Keirstyn to answer phone but the line is busy.)
    (LACEY) (hangs up phone and walks out of house fade out of door closing.)
    int. house
    (KEIRSTYN) (Fade in with keirstyn on cell phone with friend) “well i just got a facebook and i have no idea whitch pictures i should post first” (she walks off still on the phone. Fade out.) INT. HOUSE
    (lacey) (Fade in, on computer on facebook looking at her photos trying to decide which ones to post) (she see’s some older photos of her and another girl back in elementary school, she smiles and posts one of the photos on her page and titles it me and my best friend.)
    (LACEY) (Fade in, her on facebook looking at photo and smiling happily.)
    (LACEY)(Fade in dialing # on cell phone and putting it to ear, putting phone down when it goes to voiece mail.)
    INT. HOUSE
    (KEIRSTYN)(in room on phone, looking upset hangs up phone and throws it on bed then leaves room, zoom in on phone, (fade to school den in morning her sitting alone at a table.) int. school den
    (KEIRSTYN) (She looks around then sighs and looks back down at the table.)
    (KEIRSTYN) (She looks up hopefully as one of her friends walks by but they just ignore her.)(She looks back down at the table disapointed.)
    (LACEY) (fade in on her standing and watching this from a distance.)(she starts to turn around then stops and turns back, fade out)
    end part 3

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